“On the Waterfront is a story about the
battle between good and evil.”Do you agree?
You will need to write a paragraph addressing this prompt and post it on-line. You will then need to comment on a minimum of 3 different posts on ways they could improve their response. This will need to be completed by Sunday 9th of June.
Ok everyone,
ReplyDeleteto post your paragraphs can you please type (copy/paste) them into a comment as I have done here.
you can then reply to a comment (as I have just done) to offer suggestions on how the poster can improve their paragraph. Hope this helps
DeleteDoes this count as a response if I say it could have been improved by a smiley face (:D)? Everyone loves smiley faces. :D
DeleteNo Josh, this does not count but I will take that into advisement :)
DeleteI believe that the story of On the Waterfront is about the battle of good and evil. The appearance of the mobsters and the church people are highly juxtaposed in the movie. Also, the protagonist in the story, Terry Malloy, was constantly being pulled between the mobsters who represent his vicious side and by the girl, Edie Doyle, who represents his benevolent side. We can perceive how Terry conflicted between the battle of his good and evil side ever since the start of the movie where we see him following Johnny Friendly and his gang but then goes on to another direction. We can also see that the opening scene shows Johnny Friendly's shack beside another shack that has a cross on it. The movie that depicted this story, being black and white, shows a pronounced contrast between darkness and light which are also symbols of good and evil.
ReplyDeleteThis is really well written and you have used outstanding language throughout. I would make sure that you do not include "I" in your response as even though it asks "do you agree?" it is not an opinion piece. But overall I was extremely happy with this and you have definitely set the standard for the rest of the class.
DeleteA high quality analysis Sarah, in fact one of the few responses so far that don't seem to just retell the story (if anyone else reading sees this as an unfair generalisation, blame it on me being lazy and not actually reading yours).
DeleteYour example of 'another shack that has a cross on it' should have been explained, this sentence doesn't seem to fit in with the rest of the paragraph.
Otherwise good stuff.
So there you go, Constructive Hamburger of Criticism style: (|0|)
Compared to the majority of posts which have been submitted, you mention other factors within the film which play an important role to representing good and evil. Which makes yours a stand-out! Although I would have liked it if you extended your response with the last few sentences, it seems too brief. But great job Bean-bean!
DeleteI liked you paragraph. I think that you analysed good and evil very well without giving a summary of events. There was a sentence in the middle which i don't really understand, it seemed to miss its opening point. You used a very good vocabulary in this paragraph as well. Good Job
Deleteby reading yours there is nothing to correct your paragraph was well written and your vocab was high..grat wrok..Miss apple
DeleteThis was verry well and deeply analysed Sarah. You covered the whole story and fantastic interpretation..:)
DeleteYou used outstanding language to conveys what you tring to say throughout this paragaph, you made me understand this film more well and you made a good exemple for rest of us, well donw Sarah.
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Deletelol great post jason
DeleteJason post great lol
Delete“On the Waterfront” is not JUST a story between the battle of good and evil, the plot is driven around the protagonist’s internal struggles after the death of his fellow longshoremen Joey. Evidently the protagonist, Terry Malloy’s, is presented with a black and white choice between remaining “deaf and dumb” or becoming a ‘stool’ pigeon that would testifying against Johnny Friendly, the antagonist behind Waterfront’s corruption. Terry’s decision to testify against Friendly demonstrates his transformation from being a “bum”, to become a hero and leader for himself and his fellow dockworkers. His choice to testify against Friendly is brought on by his newly awakened conscience. This conscience is a result of his love for Edie Doyle, and the persistent pled of Father Barry. Even at the beginning of the film we saw Terry’s reaction to the death of Joey, his faced spoke for itself, confused, uncomfortable and full of guilt. But with his newfound friends they encouraged him to break away from the mobster’s influences to make the morally correct decision.
ReplyDeleteThis is a fantastic paragraph Jason. Well done. Your lanaguage is extremely strong but a couple things to work on:
Delete1. "'stool' pigeon that would testifying against..." need to check your grammar here as it makes no sense
2. "Even at the beginning of the film we saw..." if you are writing something like this don't you should refer to 'we' as the audience etc... as this allows the formal tone to be maintained.
But overall as I said great work I am quite happy with this. Your quotes are super!
I really enjoyed this, I particularly loved the conviction and vernacular. Only problem I had was with the grammar, a two minute proof read would have made a prodigious difference.
Deletethis is terrible; absolute crap. i'm very dissappointed in you jason i expected better.
Delete^^ thats the complete opposite of what i want to say. This is very well written. You can tell that there is thought behind it. However there is some grammatical work to be had on this; but thats nothing big
I loved how you incorporated the quotes to your response. (I'm really bad at putting quotes on.) The only problem I see is the grammar. And... I commend your vocabulary. (|0|)
DeleteNice work bro, especially how quoted the film and listed it's main points. for example how Terry gets involved on the wrong side of some dangerous people and how it leads to the demise of close relatives.
DeleteAfter I published mine, i read your paragraph and i felt extremely overwhelmed. Good job jason.
DeleteWhen I read I saw yours was another kind of interpretation of the Kazan's film. I agreed with your argument Jason. I don't know which grammer was right or wrong but I got your point,love it. Good job.
Deletegood job Joson, this is good paragraph,strong language,good grammar,everything is fantastic,its a good piece as far i can tell. well done
DeleteI think It is the battle between good and evil too because the protagonist, Terry Malloy faced a lot of redemptions which came from Johnny Friendly’s disrespect that Terry tried to overcome. Hoodlum called him a 'bum' which is also a sign of evil. He didn't want that name and fought "Don't say to me Edie, Don't! say to me...now" which was he is not a 'bum'.
ReplyDeleteThat makes himself changed to become a hero. Father Barry encouraged the protagonist to confess himself to innocent Edie what he had done on Joey. This is the battle of good and evil. In the movie, the lovely Edie and Father Barry also represent goodness which turned Terry into heroic longshoreman. The dark and noisy horn and the gangs also represent bad and evil. By Khual K.
Khual your grammar is quite good here, well done. I think we need to work a little at including quotes effectively but your ideas and concepts about the motivations behind the characters is quite good. Well done.
DeleteI like your inclusion of quotes Khual! :D (As I didn't include any in my own) Although I did have to re-read a sentence or two, but that's understable, the majority of your paragraph was well written and conveyed what you wanted to say clearly.
DeleteI enjoyed reading your piece but I'm not quite sure about your comment on one of the characters.For the character Edie, how do you know she was lovely? Just need a bit more explanation on this. This was a well thought out piece.:)
Delete'On the Waterfront' is not so much about the battle between good and evil, rather it describes the series of events that define a good and evil. The majority of the story is told from Terry's, the protagonist's, perspective; as such the obvious entities of good and evil are warped to coalesce with Terry's values. Even through Johnny Friendly's oppression of the long shore men, Terry and the other's refuse to 'eat cheese for nobody' for fear of treason and even death. Thus an internal conflict is waged in the protagonist's mind: to further oppress the innocent majority but remain loyal to his friends, or work with Father Barry to champion the long shore men but bite the hand that feeds him. The death of Terry's brother, Charley Malloy, provided the catalyst for Terry to make this decision; a good and evil was established and the internal conflict was resolved.
ReplyDelete"that define a good and evil" what? Not too sure about this one Josh, it reads more like a summary of the film with highbrow language that doesn't really seem to have a place or purpose. You have an outstanding vocabulary just be careful how you use it.(Remember: "Politics in the English Language". I do really like the concept that the film is not about good and evil but the choices that people make in their lives that could lead them down either path.
Delete(like what nikki said) 'that define a good and evil....(blank). That needs to be finish. And their doesnt seem to be much of an analysis within this, just a summation of the storyline. Perhaps you should've used your thought of the 'characters choices' to further reinforce that the theme of good and evil is not what the movie is about.
DeleteIf that made sense........
Firstly, the first sentence is correct; may I remind you that 'good' and 'evil' can be nouns, they are nouns in the prompt (Although it may have been clearer to have had it read 'define a good and AN evil').
DeleteSecondly, the prompt is asking what I thought the story was about, so that is what I did; I gave a summary of the story.
It would have also been an improvement, as Mark suggested, to have linked back to the contention to reinforce my point.
Really good vocabulary here, Josh. However, it felt more like a summary. Another thing is the first sentence, which looks like a big issue here. I would suggest just to make it 'define good and evil' rather than 'define a good and an evil' to make it sound "complete". Another good thing in your response is the use of cliché. (|0|)
Deleterelax josh we are here to help not to tell you off. Constructive criticism. As the others have said you have great vocabulary, but i think in the beginning sentence you just need to take out the 'a' and it will makew more sense. I think you did well, but maybe next time you should look more into you points.
DeleteI see you included the word "Catalyst" in your reply. I like that word and that instantly makes me like your piece even more. However, on a more focused point of view, i think the way you incorporated the film's main quotes have a positive effect on persuading the reader to agree with you. I also agree that the film isn't really about good and evil as it describes what evil really is. Not what's good about it. Good work.
DeleteOn the Waterfront is clearly a story about battle between good and evil. This story shows a world when no one can escape, when no one is free and not given a chance for what they can do. At the early scenes when we see Terry is following Johnny Friendly and his gang, this show us that he is being used by the mobsters and being drag into an evil world. Johnny Friendly treated Terry with no respect like a child. After Joey’s death, terry finds himself being used by the mobster as an ignorant bum for an evil proposes. He tried to break free but he is not strong enough until he met Edie who represent the integrity of him. Terry has to choose sides and he is struggling to choose between the value of his brother’s Charley and the mobs and his girlfriend Edie. But at the end, the death of Charley turned Terry into heroic. The darkness of the movie represent bad and evil.
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Mrs. i don't know why i can't post it so instead i email it to you. can you please post it for me. Thank you
Kler this is a good effort but again it feels a little like a recount of the film rather than an analysis of the themes that are present within. Your understanding of Terry's struggle is extremely high, well done. Watch your grammar as it needs a little work too, but overall I was not disappointed in it. Well done Kler.
Deletei like how you stated that Edie was Terry's integrity, that was well put. Your relating between parts of the movie and the theme of evil was well done aswell. But with the last line 'the darkness of....' are you saying that the actual darkness of the cinematography representing evil or that the movie itself is dark in nature?
DeleteI can see that you had a clear understanding of the film, which is good. However, there was no clear analysis of the movie. Also, I felt like 'mobs' and 'mobsters' were repetitive so I would suggest that you find synonyms of it. Overall, I think that this is a good effort. (|0|)
DeleteYour understanding of the characters internal conflicts
Deletewas well read. However, by stating that Edie was Terry's girlfriend may raise a few questions as they weren't anything exclusive. Love interest would have been a better
description of their relationship. All in all, good job Kler-bear!
''At the early scenes when we see Terry is following Johnny Friendly and his gang, this show us that he is being used by the mobsters and being drag into an evil world''. i like this sentence :). the peice was really good but i think it would've been just a bit better if you used few more strong words. Anyways it was a pretty good piece
DeleteKazan’s ‘On the Waterfront’ isn’t literally about the battle of good and evil, rather a recount of struggles the characters encounter and adhere to, to survive the life presented to them within the 1950’s. The protagonist, Terry Malloy, saw him fighting against his moral code after continuous confrontations with Edie Doyle and current connections with the mob. Terry’s internal struggles had sparked after the sudden realisation of the corrupt actions he was partaking in to aid the mobsters, a job which ensured him constant work and income. However, by developing a relationship with Edie the ignition of his inner conflicts were confirmed as her innocence and purity influenced his character to transform into a better person. In comparison the antagonist Johnny Friendly sought after living comfortably, eliminating any individuals who posed a threat to his lifestyle. Unlike Terry whose conscience affected his actions and thought processes, Friendly didn’t second guess his choices and remained a consistent character throughout the film. His major struggles beginning once Terry imposed. Although there many motifs and symbolism which represent good and evil within the film, it is evident that ‘On the Waterfront’ subsequently reflects the standard of living dockworkers were subject to at the time.
ReplyDeleteVery good grammar and vocabulary here, Ebuluku. I also liked how you juxtaposed Terry Malloy and Johnny Friendly to prove your point. However, sometimes I feel like you are retelling the story. But then it goes back to your analysis which is good. I also commend your use or 'Kazan's 'On the Waterfront'' because you're the only one who actually stated Kazan. (|0|)
DeleteI really loved your last line, I felt that is was an apt discussion of the intention of the film. I did notice that it took quite a while to "get going" and make a significant point but overall I was very happy with the vocabulary and your choices of words were outstanding. Well done
DeleteI agree with Nikki with the "get going", the beginning of this response was quite tedious but (!) as soon as it got to “The protagonist, Terry Malloy, saw him fighting against his moral code…” intrigued of what you were going to say next. Strong vocabulary. Strong finish. +1
DeleteYou paragraph was extremely good, you used outstanding language throughout your paragarph, there is nothing i can pick on, also your grammar was fantastic,it shows how much you undertand this film,well done even though i didnt understand some words you used in your paragraph, but yeah, good one
DeleteYo Ebuluku. I liked that you mentioned that the movie reflects the standard of living at the time, and the various moral struggles that these workers have to go through. Your paragraph was well structured with excellent vocabulary.
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'On the Waterfront' is not a movie about good versus evil, it is more focused upon the moral battles one has within themselves. More specifically the conflict of the protagonist, and his inner conscience. Focusing on the story of Terry Malloy, this movie portrays the morale battles he has within, when he is deceived into being the catalyst of a murder. This compels him to break from the state of 'D and D' and carve a path of retribution for himself and the longshoremen, against the antagonist, Johnny Friendly. Although the movie portrays the protagonist to be at a crossroad between good and evil, it does not draw the audience to focus on what road was taken, rather the inner act of choosing which road
ReplyDeleteGood concise, laconic response Mark. It would have been effective to use 'moral conflicts' rather than 'moral battles' in the first sentence to link to the theme for this year. This also seemed similar to a retelling
Deleteof the story, just shorter Kler's and mine. However, your final sentence sets it apart as it links back to the contention and explains your example.
So there you go, Constructive Hamburger of Criticism style: (|0|)
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Deleteuhh... Mark, question. Is the last sentence complete? 'Cause it felt like it has more words after it. xD
DeleteI really liked this Mark I though you have demonstrated a significant understanding of the text. I did however, feel that it was too short and I felt that your final sentence was lacking the impact needed to conclude your paragraph.
DeleteI see where you going with your point of view but how exactly do you end it? Adding "D and D" into your paragraph is a vital influence as it portrays the exact feeling of what Terry is going through.
DeleteI'm not going to comment about the ending of your paragraph as it seems that everyone else did, but i will agree with Ms davies comment about your paragraph being abit short. I thought that your language was extremely strong and it's a well
Deletewritten paragraph. GoOo0o0o0oOoOod job sir.
You have a good understanding like Ms Nikki commanded before.The way you said was differt from me but it seems like you agree with the topic.Anyway I really like it Mark, :))
DeleteGood paragaph, i think you and Joson are the only two whos against that on the waterfront is not battle between good and evil, that turns out well.one thing is your paragraph was quite short,but everything was great after all
DeleteThe film ‘on the waterfront’ is a story about the protagonist Terry Malloy, being pulled into a tug of war between good and evil. Johnny friendly and his cohorts represent evil which constantly forces Terry to commit crimes while Father Barry and Edie symbolize the good. His struggle to find himself between good and evil was portrayed throughout the film, due to Terry’s unknowing participation leading to Joey’s death we can see through Terry’s body language that he is expressing pangs of conscience and also when Edie verifies that she see him more than a ‘bum’. His inner conflict began as father Barry positions him in making the ‘right choice’ by being a ‘good’ person. To become ‘good’ he must rebel against the mobsters or to become ‘evil’ he must be one of friendly’s cohort playing ‘deaf and dumb’. The good side of Terry can be seen to outweigh his evil side due to his love for Edie and want for change. However, Terry is terrified of the consequence associated in his path to become good. Hence Terry is in constant conflict in deciding between good and evil.
ReplyDeleteYour use of metalanguage is superb but it feels as they they were included later not in the original writing to this paragraph. Some other things to work on are: "symbolise the good" for starters the grammar is not great but you have also used the American spelling. Also you tend to have pangs of guilt not so much conscience. I really like the sentence second from the end it is well structured and makes your contention clear. Well done.
DeleteI really like you paragraph but sometimes you sentences were hard to understand. It seemed like you were missing some grammar and even some letters, maybe you were typing too fast. I think the direction you went with your paragraph was really good and different, it didn't sound like a summary.
DeleteWell done.
your paragrah was well structured and it shows that you are well understanding of the film. Good job ching ching :D
Delete“On the Waterfront” by Elia Kazan is a film which depicts the battle of good and evil through the choices Terry, the protagonist, makes. Terry must make the decision on whether to come forward and testify against Johnny Friendly and make the right decision, or fall in with the mobsters and make the wrong choice. Throughout the film Terry is plagued with deciding what is right and wrong, unable to choose between doing what is right for the community and what is easy for himself because outside pressures, disillusions and threats. Both Edie and Father Barry try to persuade Terry into standing up to the mobsters as the regret from what they have pushed him into doing is affecting his “conscience”. This is opposed to the pressure that Terry is experiencing from the mobsters. Johnny Friendly aims to coerce Terry into submission through blackmail and the threat of death if he doesn’t follow “deaf and dumb”.
ReplyDeletePlease be nice!!!!!
Well first things first, your grammar and typing is far better here than it has been in your comments on other posts. Please read over ALL your work before publishing (there is a spell check on here so no excuse) I thought this was good, but it came across as a surface interpretation of the film, which is again fine as we have not looking into the deeper meaning of the film yet but this is something to work on for next time. Grammar to work on "pushed him into doing is affecting his..." feels like your sentence is incomplete and needs some work. I like that you in included quotes and mentioned Elia Kazan as this is the first time you have mentioned him you would need his full name. Overall I was happy, didn't love it but was quite happy. Hope this was nice enough for your Catherine. :)
DeleteI like that your piece has just the right amount of interesting words. Just watch out for overlapping of words in the piece.Overall, this piece is pretty good.
Deletei really enjoyed reading your paragraph Catherine :) it is well written and really addressed the prompt, your paragraph shows that you have a very good understanding of Terry in the film. great job!!! :D
DeleteThe information that you have provided show that you have a well understanding of the film but you need to check your grammar a little bit but overall your piece was good and i enjoy reading it.......:D
DeleteKler wah :)
The battle between good and evil rages on once more with Elia Kazan's "On The Waterfront." The film's main protagonist- Terry, is a normal guy that happens to be involved in some shady mafia group.
ReplyDeleteHowever, this does not make his life a walk in the park as he is still manages to succumb to moral choices he has to make. This makes his life a living hell. Especially when he meets Edie. Her brother gets killed in a vicious way, and naturally, she wants to find out who committed the dirty dead. Terry knows, and it kills him inside seeing Edie suffer hopelessly trying to catch the culprit and this leads to one of the hardest decisions he has to make in his entire life. Does he confess and win Edie's everlasting love? Or does he play dumb simply to frolick about in riches? The Godfather this film is not but it still shows how a simple man can be dragged down from the pedestal he stands so proudly on and how he can fall so far down into the abyss of hell with a single sentence.
Dennis this is quite a good effort but it seems that there is a familiar issue running through a large majority of pieces. You need to ensure that you are analysing the film not just retelling as this feels like a blurb that would appear on the back of a DVD cover. Also I would recommend shying away from clichés: such as "walk in the park", "living hell", dirty deed" and "kills him inside" this make the piece feel like a persuasive article rather than a text response. Finally, the comparison to The Godfather is NOT necessary and I would definitely recommend against this in your assessed pieces. You should examine the text on it's own and in it's entirety.
DeleteThis piece was entertaining but I'm not so sure about the rhetorical questions in the last lines.It feels like you were telling what's happening on the next episode of a TV series. It's not bad but I don't think it fits with your your piece. The overall flow of writing is really good.
DeleteDennis you're piece sounded like you were retelling the story. The use of cliches were very good, however it makes your piece sounded like a persuasive analysis of the film which does not address to the prompt between good and evil. I like how you addressed the God father in parallel to with this film which lead me to agree that the conflict between good and evil does relate to the film. Good job bro ;)
DeleteI REALLY ENJOYED the rhetorical questions! Clichés and descriptive language will get you far (Love the creativeness). I do believe you were recapping the story rather than responding to the set prompt, maybe work on this rather than summarising as you tried to address to the prompt. Other than that KEEP IT UP! +1
DeleteDennis, this was the most interesting piece out of all of the paragraphs posted and I thoroughly enjoyed it. However, there were some spelling mistakes and I got the feeling that your piece could've been the voiceover for the trailer of 'On the Waterfront'. Overall I love reading your writing and thought your vocabulary was astounding. Keep up the good work! :D
DeleteElia Kazan's 'On the Waterfront' depicts the struggle between the unscrupulous mobsters and the longshoremen during the 1950's. In this sense, the movie can be seen as a battle between good and evil. However, the film focuses on the life of Terry Malloy, in particular the indecision within himself to speak up against the union. This uncertainty was caused by Terry's predisposed views to not "eat cheese for nobody" conflicting with his burning desire to not be seen as a "bum" in the eyes of Edie. Overall, this story has been heavily influenced by Elia Kazan's personal life, causing the storyline to stray away from the good vs evil, longshoremen vs mobsters, and instead emphasise the internal conflicts dealt upon someone trying to speak up.
ReplyDeleteI quite liked this Brandon, it was a good response but I am not sure if it is to the prompt mentioned above. It feels like it is responding to something like "what are the overall themes present in On The Waterfront?" But I thought the inclusion of quotes was quite good and your vernacular is very strong. Well done
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Deletei liked your paragraph its very interesting, your use of qoute is really good it supported your contention. Great JOB brandon :D
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DeleteElia Kazan's 'On The Waterfront' is perceptibly a film about the confrontation between good vs evil powerd by extended symbolism. Good have been symbolized in various ways during the film, the church had appeard plenty of times in the film which represents purity,goodness,honesty and love.The apperance of the court signifies justice. After Joey is murdered by Johnny Friendly, the major antagonist on 'On The Waterfront' and the Mobsters, his father gives his jacket to Dugan, which he also gets murdered by Johny Friendly, the jacket ends up with Terry and he aswell speaks out about the identity of the real murderer of Joey.
ReplyDeleteThe possession of the jacket symbolizes the final choice of the owner of the jacket and how he decided to come forward and testify against Johnny Friendly rather keeping his mouth shut. Terry's love for Edie also symbolizes good, 'Edie is the best thing to ever happen to me'. Johny Friendly illustrates 'evil' in the film, a bully who even though many men allready work for him, he still finds away to torment the ones who contravene his orders. Johnny friendly forcing Terry's own brother to pull a gun on him as to not confess against him in court,and to not reveal justice shows that the film 'On The Waterfront' is about a battle between good and evil.
Hassnen this is quite a good response but I don't feel as though you have addressed the prompt. This question is asking more about the characters and their portrayal of good and evil rather than the symbolism that has been employed by Kazan. In addition to this despite having strong language your grammar really detracts from your contention. But overall a great paragraph but to a different prompt.
DeleteI agree with what Mrs Davies said you didn't really adress the prompt. But overall i really enjoyed reading your paragraph, its very well written and shows that you have a good understanding of the characters in the film. WELL DONE Hassnen :)
DeleteThis post stood out the most to me! I think you didn’t address to the prompt clearly enough as it was asking about the battle of good and evil, although I did understand where you were going with ‘symbolism’ used in the film as a response to the prompt. Other than that I did enjoy how you thought of good and evil from a different aspect and that’s what makes this piece unique. keep it up! ++
DeleteThe film "on the waterfront" is about the battle between the good and evil, because in this film,it decribes the prtagonist "Terry Malloy being pulled between the mobsters who represent the evil side and Edie and father Barry who represent the good side. Terry's inner strugles to choose between the good and evil, either stay at Johnny's shack and play D and D or stand up testify for Joey's death. In addition, by developing a relationship with Edie, and how innocent and pure Edie was, it effect on Terry that makes him to reconsider between good and evil.After all, throughout his love for Edie and father Barry's encouragement also his brother Charley's death has changed him to become a hero and stand up testify against Johnny Friendly. The darkness of the mobsters and the goodness of Edie and father Barry represent the evil and good too.
ReplyDeleteRongjie I really enjoyed this response I think you have really demonstrated a significant understanding of the text well done. Some things to work on are that it is Father Barry not "father Barry" Father is a title like doctor or mister so it should have a capital letter when it is their name. Additionally when you quote such as D and D you need quotation marks.
Deleteyour paragraph was great and it was well written but make sure you check your spelling and work harder on it. overall good job Rong Rong..
DeleteHey Ronjie, good piece. There were some grammatical errors and some spelling errors but overall your paragraph was a good one.
DeleteHey Ronjie, your piece had a very clear outline of who was good and evil which is fantastic and easily understood. Though there were some grammatical errors, it's a good overview. ;D
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ReplyDeleteTo define Elia Kazan’s ‘On the Waterfront’ as the clichéd story of ‘good vs. evil’ would just be an insult to a timeless classic! It is more along the lines of whether we fight for justice or conform within a corrupt society. This film isn’t as clear cut as most of the movies that are distributed today. Issues of loyalty and justice are conflicted with each other and values are turned upside down. This makes it even harder to class the characters as good and evil. Some are obvious, such as Johnny Friendly since his traits of dominance can be highlighted when he fires one of workers .He is recognised easily as an antagonist. Terry, on the other hand is neutral in both parties. He aided in the death of Joey Doyle and also destroyed Friendly’s empire. Do we associate Terry as a saviour for the workers or a coward who hid in the shadows? We just can’t be sure which group Terry should belong to, emphasising the fact the film is too complex for such a plain storyline.DKL
ReplyDeleteYou have really demonstrated strong language here, it is extremely well written. My only concern is the sentence "he aided in the death..." it does not fit in with the sentence preceding it as you have stated that Terry is neutral but then stated that he aided in the death which implies that he is not neutral. You would need to add a sentence into the paragraph here to make the two sentences flow together and explain the progression of the text is more detail but overall Khoa great effort.
DeleteLovin' the name omanomnom, as well as your paragraph.
DeleteYour piece was well written, well structured and adressed the prompt properly. Good stuff(^O^).
I like your respond especially "Terry, on the other hand is neutral in both parties" it seems right. You well written and analysis...Well done..
DeleteHey Khoa, your response is great. I enjoyed the fact that you explored the neutrality of Terry and blurred the lines between who was good and who was evil. You even made me second guess my own interpretation of the film. Great job.
DeleteThe film "On the waterfront" directed by Elia Kazan set in the 1950's demonstrates a battle between good and evil in many different perspective. The protagonist Terry Malloy who was partly responsible for Joey's death, ordered by the antagonist Johnny Friendly who was leading the mobsters in the docks of New Jersey and also the control of the entire Union. Throughout film Terry encountered many different situations from trying to discover his Identity, the choices he made to work under Johnny and a lighter path which lead to Edie who was Joey's sister. The "Battle between good and evil" throughout the film was enough to support the conflict each characters had to go through such as Father Barry's appeal to lead every longshoreman into a fair working conditions, the agony Edie had to go through because of Joey's death and as for Joey he stood up and battled his way through the Union in order overthrow Johnny's Friendly which involves breaking the "D and D" rule. All these examples of the conflict throughout the film "On the Waterfront" have allowed me to agree that the story is a battle between good and evil.
ReplyDeleteThis is not a bad response to the prompt. Your use of metalanguage is outstanding as this demonstrates significant understanding of these terms. Your grammar does need some help as you have forgotten some of those words that help sentences flow nicely but overall good job.
Delete**and as for Charlie he stood up and battled....**
ReplyDeleteElia Kazan's 'On the Waterfront' is a true depiction of the struggle between good and evil. The gangsters that run the people, are put up against the minority that stands up against them. It seems like there are insurmountable odds to take down these mobsters, but good will always come about. Although the mobsters have the ability to kill off threats and in turn make people stay quiet about matters, positivity will alway triumph over negativity. This is shown in Terry Malloy, as he comes around and pledges to testify against the men he once worked for. In the bigger picture, it seems he is up against a unbeatable foe, but his demonstration of courage is enough to have the rest of the longshoremen stand with him.
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Miguel this is quite a good response and some of the themes that you have discussed demonstrate significant understanding but your language is too relaxed. You need to ensure that you formalise your language to ensure that your full understanding is not lost.
DeleteYour paragraph was easy to understand i really like that because i don't need to read it a few times to fully understand it :) your paragraph also showed a good understanding of the film. Great job miguel :D
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